Tuesday, June 28, 2011

Writer's Block

I'm sitting here, staring at a card I got for the person who had the stroke, trying to think of what to write.

Dear X,

I hear you're improving, and I'm sure glad of that news. I was so sorry to hear about your stroke, especially coming on the ____ trail, since I know how much you love to _____. I'm thinking good thoughts for you and hoping you'll soon be able to be out _____ing again.

Best wishes,

Bardiac (except I'll use my regular name)

Feedback?

4 comments:

  1. I'd cut out "especially coming on the ____ trail, since I know how much you love to _____" and leave the rest. Then send!

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  2. Thanks, NocoleandMaggie, I revised :)

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  3. I think it's awesome--when I had thyroid surgery several years ago, I really appreciated short notes b/c anything longer made my head hurt! I'm sure your friend will appreciate hearing from you.

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  4. I would put in more words and fewer fill-in-the-blanks :)

    (That was a joke, in case it's not obvious.)

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