One of my colleagues is working on a book, and was talking about it to me, since it's something I'm at least tangentially interested in, and I said I'd be interested to read it, so they emailed me the first chapter draft, and I'm reading it.
I don't know quite how to respond.
Here's the thing. You know how students sometimes spend a long time winding up, setting up stuff, quoting "as X says" and such, just bits? It does that in a major way. It doesn't engage with the Xs it quotes, just takes quotes and does the "as X says" thing.
And I'm 11 pages in to a 30 plus page chapter, and I have no idea why I'm reading (except that I said I would). What I want from an introduction or introductory chapter is to know the basic argument, and how that argument differs from, disagrees with, or adds to what's come before. This chapter, so far, gives me none of that.
So if I say that, what I'm basically saying is, you really need to totally rework the first chapter, and I'm pretty sure this colleague has worked very hard on this and doesn't want to hear that the chapter isn't working.
And if I don't say that, I'm not responding helpfully or ethically.